Darkness
I scream your death
Shattered by sharpened steel
Sliced lifeless by silent bruised breath
My love
Dissolves
Disappears slow
Swallowed whole and complete
Discarded with wind’s nothingness
Darkness
My love
Darkness
I scream your death
Shattered by sharpened steel
Sliced lifeless by silent bruised breath
My love
Dissolves
Disappears slow
Swallowed whole and complete
Discarded with wind’s nothingness
Darkness
My love
Call me Hanq 
well done on the personification here..makes the struggle even more palpable and i like the contrast as well between love and darkness…for me it can be read in two ways and always hope that love wins ya know…smiles
Oui, love always wins. Darlmess is a blanket for cold feet.
darkness
Wow, that love won’t be returning, will it?
There is more to this story, I feel.
These roll off the tongue when you read them in your head.
Oh such love sounds like a bad omen… take care..
…at some point i think we share the same kind of darkness… excellent take on cinquains Henry… smiles…
ha…very nice….great use of alliteration in this to give it a bit of a dance…nice intensity in that first one as well…lots of action….the feeling, well not so much…smiles.
Darkness looms deep in both of these cinquains, Henry. Love the poetic intensity.
You have been thinking piercing thoughts lately, Henry.
Love the theme of darkness in both cinquain ~ The twist on the My Love in the second, gives it a different meaning ~ A pleasure to read this morning ~
sad and scary altogether… places each of us sometimes go… bring in His light
Wow, this is intense, Henry. Brilliant use fo the form, though 🙂
Ouch! Strong cinquain….great use of the form..it heightens the power of it..
I agree with Katy. The form serves the message well. Powerful and concentrated.
Powerful piece, Henry. There’s such beauty in between the darkness and love. Well done!
Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!